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He was the fire
Devouring flame
Wine until bottom
And pain of fame

He was my father
His anger like flood
We sealed our Oath
In fire and blood

The flame extinguished
By Oath we're still bound
Through tears and pain
No rest to be found

The blood on my hands
And my hand in chains
What was it for
When nothing remains?

The Light we sought, burns
So close, yet so far
We are not worthy
To touch a star

Burning flame, take me
And clean the stain
Take the cursed Jewel
And end my pain!

In fire it started
In fire it ends
Just like my father
The fire in my veins
Maedhros, son of Fëanor

Contest price for :iconkittykatkanie: for the 1st place in the "Elflings" contest held by :iconelves-of-tolkien:

She wanted a poem about Maedhros in love, and if not in love, then just about him... I'm sorry Nelyo, I'm not good in writing romances. So here is a tragical poem about Maedhros...

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:icondaughteroflaurelin:
DaughterOfLaurelin Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is amazing! Great job!! :o (Eek) 
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:iconmirachravaia:
MirachRavaia Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much!
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:iconrosyan:
Rosyan Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Student General Artist
...wow... I have no words.
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:iconmirachravaia:
MirachRavaia Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much!
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:iconcvokhauz:
Cvokhauz Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012
Such a beautiful poem!
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:iconmirachravaia:
MirachRavaia Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you!
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:iconcvokhauz:
Cvokhauz Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012
You're welcome :)
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:iconairysilvertail:
airysilvertail Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh! I love it so much! :) May I ask you for a permission to translate this poem into russian? Of course with all links to the original and so on...
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:iconmirachravaia:
MirachRavaia Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, I'm really glad you like it! You are welcome to try translating it. I have the translation of the first verse to Slovak, maybe it'll help you as it's a Slavic language as well:

Bol hukot ohňa
Bol plameň dravý
Víno až do dna
A bolesť slávy
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:iconcvokhauz:
Cvokhauz Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012
And so much similar to czech :)
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:iconairysilvertail:
airysilvertail Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yay! Thanks! It sounds a little similar to russian. :D
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:iconfiofiorina:
Fiofiorina Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2011  Professional Artisan Crafter
Very very beautiful.
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:iconmirachravaia:
MirachRavaia Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much!
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:iconfiofiorina:
Fiofiorina Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2011  Professional Artisan Crafter
You are welcome :-)
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:iconkistithen:
KisTithen Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2011   Digital Artist
I'm not a writer, I especially don't know how to write a decent poem, so I can't give you a normal comment, but...
Oh god... it touched my heart deeply. Thank you for this miracle. :heart:
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:iconmirachravaia:
MirachRavaia Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much, I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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:iconverella:
Verella Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2011
Sooo freaking amazing. Seriously WOW. c:
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:iconmirachravaia:
MirachRavaia Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much!
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:iconsirielle:
Sirielle Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2011   Digital Artist
Fantastic!
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:iconmirachravaia:
MirachRavaia Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you!
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:iconvisanastasis:
VisAnastasis Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
In fire it started
In fire it ends
Just like my father
The fire in my veins
:iconiloveitplz:
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:iconmirachravaia:
MirachRavaia Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you!
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:iconlirulin-yirth:
Lirulin-yirth Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2011
As I have already said, it's wonderful
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:iconmirachravaia:
MirachRavaia Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you!
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:iconlirulin-yirth:
Lirulin-yirth Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2011
Most welcome!
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Zireael07 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderful poem. Brilliant!
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:iconmirachravaia:
MirachRavaia Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much!
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jankolas Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Prekrásne. Vždy obdivujem, ako dokážeš napísať niečo tak dokonalé... a v cudzom jazyku. :eyepopping:
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MirachRavaia Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Ďakujem! V angličtine sa neskloňuje, takže niekedy mi to príde ľahšie ako po slovensky...
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StrawberryJam1313 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011
Oh wow...that is a brilliant poem... (We're studying poetry right now! *takes notes*) I really think it captures his essence ^^
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:iconmirachravaia:
MirachRavaia Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much! I always thought fire was Maedhros' element, not only because the hair colour :)
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Dunepath Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011
I agree to all that was said before - what a breathtaking poem.
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:iconmirachravaia:
MirachRavaia Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :rose:
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:icondunepath:
Dunepath Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011
You're welcome :)
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Nosterineth Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011
A wonderful poem, Mirach, so fierce and powerful! I absolutely love it!
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:iconmirachravaia:
MirachRavaia Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much! :iconpyrodanceplz:
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Nosterineth Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011
My pleasure :)
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kittykatkanie Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011
;v;

This is wonderful!
I can never write a poem (in English) that rhymes....
Like many others mentioned already, I love the last stanza...
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MirachRavaia Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm glad you like it!
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:iconkittykatkanie:
kittykatkanie Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011
I don't like it, I LOVE IT :glomp:
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MirachRavaia Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconpyrodanceplz:
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ninquetari Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011
I love your poems. Indeed, his life were a tragedy ruled by fire.
I like the idea of the last stanza, but something there doesn't feel right for me - everything else is great. Once again, though, it can be me not fluent enough in English. ;p
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:iconmirachravaia:
MirachRavaia Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much! I'm not sure, it rhymes to me, but maybe my pronounciation is wrong...
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:iconninquetari:
ninquetari Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011
Again, it can be MY pronounciation which is wrong. (:
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:iconmirachravaia:
MirachRavaia Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Probably not, according to the other comments
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Burning-Nightingale Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011
Have to say I ADORE the last stanza....Nicely done :)
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:iconmirachravaia:
MirachRavaia Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! It seems the last stanza is bringing forth some polemics, some like it, some not. But Nelyo likes it, and that's important :D
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Burning-Nightingale Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011
I enjoy it for some reason....But it's good that it brings out strong reactions in people!
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avi17 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011
Normally I would run like hell from rhyming poetry on this kind of subject matter, but I really like this. :D The simplicity and short phrases make the emotion very raw and believable. I especially like the last four stanzas (even though the last one doesn't rhyme. XP)
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MirachRavaia Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much! The last stanza rhymes to me, but maybe my pronounciation is wrong...
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