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April 5, 2012
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Create and sing!
Your mind has wings from Music wrought
In an eye's blink to being brought in Timeless Hall
What you can think to the last dot, that I will call to make a world
                  The horse's trott, the fir-trees tall, the heat and cold
                                        The creatures small, and big and bold
                                                                    Just as I've told:

                                                                                   Eä! Be!
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The 5th poem for :iconnapowrimo2012: (The 4th is in Slovak)

This is an experiment with form - as you can see, I like rhymes :)
Let's call it (=mrnakes' suggestion) a diagonal. A tutorial is here: [link]

The rhyming scheme is

a
a b
a b c
a b c d
...b c d
......c d
.........d

with every rhyme containing of 4 syllables.

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:iconatem925:
That last bit:
Eä! Be!
What language is it in and what does it mean?
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=MirachRavaia May 7, 2012   General Artist
The translation is included :) - "Eä" means "be" in Quenya (a language invented by Tolkien, about whose universe the poem is)
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Oh. Now I don't feel very smart... ^^;
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=MirachRavaia May 7, 2012   General Artist
:pat:
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:iconatem925:
:aww: Thank you. :aww:
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Mood: Love !Not2Mention Apr 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I like it.
I picked up on the scheme right away, very well done.
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=MirachRavaia Apr 10, 2012   General Artist
Thank you very much! I'm glad the scheme is easy to spot!
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~Zireael07 Apr 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is awesome!!!
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=MirachRavaia Apr 5, 2012   General Artist
Thank you!
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